Tried writing a horror story from a teddy bear's point of view

I thought it would be cute and creepy, but 3 paragraphs in I realized the bear was just narrating dust particles on a shelf. What worked for me was switching to the bear watching a kid have nightmares, that gave it real tension. Any tips for keeping a non-human narrator from getting boring?

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wright.lisa24d ago

Did you try giving the bear a weird, obsessive quirk like counting floorboards or something? That kept me hooked in mine.

jana11923d ago

Ugh, counting floorboards sounds a lot more interesting than my bear's quirk, which is just “standing there, looking creepy” - maybe I should take notes from you instead of him.

kim69323d ago

Speaking of weird quirks, my uncle's dog still thinks the mailman is out to get him after 10 years.